Create and Describe Your Own Creature
(Nogard Taniwha)
WALT: be descriptive in our writing.
Look at the description of a Nogard. Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it. Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).
You must .....
- Have a name for your creature
- Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
- Describe the shapes
- Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
- What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
- Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
- What colours is it?
- Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
- Keep it simple and clear!
- Use correct punctuation and spelling.
- Check that your sentences make sense.
Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words. This is what good descriptive writing does.
Create your piece of writing here
Milan Jamieson `
Have ever seen a SCARY Taniwha? Well I have. He protects me from all danger. My Taniwha is called Marwerewere. Marwerewere is a dangerous creature, but he likes humans and he likes me He has dark green skin and bright yellow eyes as bright as the sun. He has triangles half way down his arm. He has four long arms and four short tawa legs and blue hands as bright as the ocean. He has short gold wild curly hair. He has 4 fluffy bright pink wings. His bright red tounge is poking out. He is skinny and straight and lives in Aotearoa. There is a cave in the mountain where he sleeps and when Marwerewere jumps in his cave the cave rumbles. He breathes out fire. Marwerewere has big grey pointy ears like the grey clouds. He hears my call from miles away. He usually takes me to the ocean. We go flying in the air and look out for Ahie. Sometimes the Ahie dive up and down and splash us I like taniwha and he likes me.
Peer Evaluation Name of Peer: Sasha
What I think you did well: describing what her taniwha looks like.
What I think you could improve on: Putting in the correct punctuation.
Self Evaluation
What I think I did well: I think i did well on my maori languages
What I could improve on: Making sure my sentences make sense
Kia ora Milan. You have done a lovely description of your taniwha. I really liked how you described what he looks like and used similes to help us imagine him like, "yellow eyes as bright as the sun." Something you could improve on is your punctuation. You are still missing some full stops. Also the Maori word for dolphin is Aihe. It would be great to see you go back and fix these things up. I really liked how you described where he lives and how you can call him from anywhere. I can just imagine you calling up a wonderful taniwha!
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