Hello Milan, This is a great poem. I like how you had put pictures of what you were writing about in the poem. I noticed that you had some punctuation to fix so you could fix that up. Next time remember not to put yellow on green, because you can’t see it very well. The marshmallow sentence reminded me of when I went to Quinney’s bush, and we had marshmallows.
Hello Milan,
ReplyDeleteThis is a great poem. I like how you had put pictures of what you were writing about in the poem. I noticed that you had some punctuation to fix so you could fix that up. Next time remember not to put yellow on green, because you can’t see it very well.
The marshmallow sentence reminded me of when I went to Quinney’s bush, and we had marshmallows.
Thank you jennae
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